In this blog post, I will talk about the feedback I received for my twitterive.

I was very excited to share my doggy twitterive with my classmates. I had this in my head and I was happy to put it all on the website. I did state that I wanted it from the dog's view but somewhere along that process, it turned into I was telling the story. That was pointed out to me and I didn't even realize it until I presented it.
As suggested, I am going to write this completely from Chasey's point of view and maybe I will add a few highlights of my own words as well and write a complete story. I will go in depth with Chasey's thoughts and actions. I will add a lot more narrative.
I will also personalize it with pictures of me and Chasey together. That was a great suggestion!
Thank you for all of your feedback, I can't wait to start Chasey's story.

Last week during class a few of my peers presented their feedback. I really enjoyed Krista's twitterive on dating. Her stories, her snapshots of the emails and pictures were hilarious. I didn't realize in the online dating world that some people are so forward! I would really like to see a date preparation. For example, 


Friday night 7 pm. 
Outfit: Red dress. 
How we're meeting: Meeting at the restaurant. 2 separate cars.
Restaurant: Olive Garden
Dinner of Choice: Salad
First Impression: Weirdo - He's wearing suspenders and thick black glasses. DOES NOT look like photo!
Topic of Discussion: He keeps talking about his cat.
Plan of Escape: Bathroom window.

I think the scenarios with as much detail as possible and photos to provide would be entertaining. 
Very intrigued to see what Krista comes up with.

I really thought Erin's twitterive was moving. This was a hard topic for her to discuss but what I love is that she was not afraid to express to her peers how this was making her feel. That heartbreak is very real and sometimes can change who we are. I love what she has going on with the photos, the letter and the very nice choice in white space. My suggestion to you is to incorporate more in depth details about how your relationship started, how it developed, why this person became so special to you and how you wrapped your world around him. Like I said in class, 7 years in a long time. Let's a see a timeline

year 1 - the honey moon stage. we did this and this.. etc..
year 2 - our first time going on vacation ... (whatever happened)
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year 7 - the year my world started to collapse


Add more pics! We want to see everything you have!
then add your stuff with the letter and the poem and how you are feeling. We see a lot of emotions but we don't see yet why it's affecting you so badly. Can't wait to see how you put your 7 years into words and pictures. 

In this blog I will discuss my plans on revising my twitterive.

Since I've decided to completely change my focus on my twitterive, I will need to start fresh. I plan on going step by step and hour by hour of what a dog's typical day at the hotel would look like.
I plan on using different genres to make it so realistic that you will feel you are the dog (Bailey) checking into the hotel. I want to add a short story of Bailey telling you what she is thinking and what is happening. For my repretend I've decided to do and hour by hour to let my readers know what the day looks like as it progresses. I want to tie it up at the end with a thank you letter from Bailey's parents for taking such good care of her while the parents were away on vacation.

I will stay in touch with Abby and together we will decide if my twitterive needs/doesn't need. I will also ask my peers to look it over to make sure my after word questions are answered. I want to make sure I stay on track with the clarity as well.

1. Is my twitterive clear and easy to follow with my repretend?
2. Do I have enough genre?
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This blog post is about the components of my twitterive. I've decided to redirect my focus on my story.  In this post I will answer the questions to help me design my new twitterive.

1)      WHO are the characters in your  story?

The main character in my story will be Bailey. She is a yellow lab. This story is Bailey's POV.

2)      WHAT is your story? WHAT  genres/modes are you using for your story?

A dog's prespective of a stay at the petshotel. What happens in the life of a dog while boarding at the hotel.
I want to use pictures, a video of a dog's view in the hotel, a poem, and a postcard writing to their parents about their experience.

3)      WHEN does your story take place?

Present Day

4)      WHERE is your place?

Mantua Petshotel

5)      WHY do you feel a  connection/lack of connection to place?

This petshotel is my full time job and my life. I take care of these dogs and spend most of my time with them. I treat these dogs as if they were my own and it's a safe and personal experience.

6)      HOW do you show your audience your connection/lack of connection to place?

I want to show my audience how this place is my life and why I love it so much. I also want to show how I have such an amazing job and why I fall in love with these dogs.